Mighty Aphrodite

I agree with Snoik--I want to say it's a cute story, too, and is. That's not a bad thing, though! And I think it's pretty good since you wrote it ...

I don't really like the rhyme scheme in this poem because it's predictable and trite. The last two lines completely break the rhyme scheme, and to me it seems like ...

I think this is a good start. It's a bit confusing, though--maybe it's because I've been awake too long today--but I don't really understand exactly what the demons are. Maybe ...

First, just a few general punctuation and grammar things: "Kitten," A voice whispered... Is what you wrote. You don't need to capitalize "a" right after the quotation. "Breathing in a ...

Actually...I like this. I think it has a lot of potential. For the most part, it's well-written, but there are some things that can be improved. In the first paragraph, ...

I think you have a good start here, but there's a few things that you should look out for. First, punctuation. Most of the mistakes are minor, but I'm anal ...

First off, I think this is really interesting. I think you could really make this great, but first you should fix a few things. This speaker sort of makes me ...